一篇论文帮我看看谢谢(1)

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2017-09-13

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"...he (was) a reporter for the Kansas City Star (before volunteering) to..."
use simple tense when you can.

"...foreign correspondent (before he went) to Paris."
you never mentioned he was in Paris. how can he "return" to Paris?
also the same problem as above. if you use "and then", you need to tell the reader when is "then". like "he worked here for how long, and then he did that", or "he worked here, and then he did that in what year".

"His first book, (")Three Stories and Ten Poems("), appeared (on shelves) in 1923."
need to say appeared where, or just use "published".
also you need to do something to let the reader know you are talking about a book title. i faintly remember it being quotation marks for books. might be underline.

awarded a Nobel Prize for his "mastery of the art of modern narration," (as shown) in

"Henery...hospital, (and) later he was moved..."

"...managed to (stay with) Henry."

as an advice the summary is way too long. not brief at all. tell the reader what kind of story it is and the major events, not how everything happened.

其它1条答案

His first book, Three Stories and Ten Poems, appeared in 1923. 这句话中的appear建议改为published

he publishedAcross the River and into the Trees. 有些句子中单词粘在一起 不知是为什么 呵呵 建议改过来 如上句:published Across两词中要有空格。 请仔细检查一下文章的这类问题 可以把文章贴到word里检查

其他的没什么大问题~~

2017-09-13